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"Partly Cloudy"
The soft pink fluffy clouds looked like cotton candy, the weather was calm and pretty.
The neighborhood was calm, soft white birds were delivering happiness to everyone from the sky. All the clouds were cheerful, but there was one cloud who was different. The sky was pure white, the sound was relaxing, it was like a lullaby.
The different cloud was grey colour, he looked like smoke. His name was Gus, Gus started molding a shape of an animal and used his lightning struck powers to give it a life. The animal turned out to be a green baby crocodile with big sparkly eyes, george cuddle the crocodile and the crocodile bitten his finger. Suddenly a soft white bird with long beak named Alvino flew to George to take the delivery, the crocodile bites Alvino on his head, the bird panicked and ran in circles.
It was sun setting, the sky became more prettier, Gus stopped the crocodile from biting Alvino’s head, Alvino carried the crocodile away and delivered it. When the bird arrived, his wings were in bad condition. After Gus created the crocodile, he created another animal.
The animal he created was a bighorn sheep Alvino was shocked when he saw the sheep, when he was going to deliver it, the bighorn sheep tackled Alvino and Gus stopped the animal from tackling him. Alvino delivered the bighorn sheep away,
after that Gus created another animal, the animal he created was a porcupine, Alvino was frightened but he still delivered it when he got the porcupine, the porcupine pricked him.
Gud created the last animal and the animal turned out to be a shark, good thing it wasn’t alive yet, but Alvino can’t take it anymore, he always gets the worst of it. He left Gus alone and find another cloud, Gus can’t stand it but when he realized that the more happiness he brings the more danger ensued.
Gus felt bad for himself, he felt jealous, then he started crying loud, Alvino and the other cloud saw him crying, the white cloud gave Alvino a gift.
Alvino went to Gus to fix their friendship he opened the gift from the other cloud gave him, it was a football gear.
Gus saw Alvino and hugged him and squeeze him tightly, Alvino wants another delivery from Gus, Gus gave him an animal to deliver, it was an electric eel, the electric eel electrified Alvino and they all laugh…
"The End"
Reflective comment/What I did good: using metaphors and putting my link/resources.
Hello Skyler, that was a really good story I liked the way that you described the setting and where they were. But next time to improve your DLO maybe you can put a description somewhere, because I had no idea what was this about, any way expect for that really good.
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